There's something so... candid about this. I can't describe it any better, it's something unbelievably intangible, but you've caught it, zoomed in on it, and stared it in the eye. There's no fanfare or mawkish sentiment- but somehow the tension just keeps building despite the blatant lack of action (at least, up until Ingrid shows up in the picture). Great pace and powerful writing. Thank you for sharing this.
Awesome stuff! I usually come here for the visual art but I saw your art somewhere on the page and I hovered my mouse over the thumbnail and I read what I could. It suddenly stopped scrolling but by the time it did, your story already had captivated me and I just had to read it until the end. Best short story I've read in a while. Awesome. Just awesome.
Maybe it's not quite proper to say this about a story with suicide in the background, but that was hilarious! Brian's cynicism and irony just killed me! I think he was the same kind of hero as Jim from "Lucky Jim" - a guy who could make any story brilliant with just his internal monologues. Congrats on the well-deserved DD^^
I know this is going to sound stupid, and you've probably already gotten a bazillion comments or so thanks to the DD, but here it is anyway.
I come to dA for visual art. Drawings and paintings and stuff. It's rare that I'll check out a literature deviation. When I see them come up in the DDs or More Like This, I sometimes read the summary and just move on with my life; other times I ignore them completely.
But this piece just sucked me in right from the beginning. So I decided to give it a shot, and the more I read, the more I got drawn into it. The more I kept going, the more I cared about Brian and Ingrid and even the other callers. Yeah, even the refrigerator guy. So if you ever had any doubts about the effectiveness of that opening, don't worry. And whatever it is that got my attention, the rest of the story maintains it: I have the attention span of a... thing... what's for lunch, anyway?... and yet I was totally invested in this story until I finished it.
So thanks for the great story (and the reminder to start paying more attention to literature deviations).