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For my January 2013 prompt…

I generally don't write in 1st person, if there's some tense switches, let me know; I caught what I could.
comments and critiques are welcome but not required -- i'll leave that up to you guys

9-28-13: thanks to everyone who collected/faved this today, i appreciate your support :heart:
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Daily Deviation

Given 2013-09-28
Communications 101 by `raspil is "simple, yet effective" (suggester's words). ( Suggested by Dr-Vergissmeinnicht and Featured by neurotype )
DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by =DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here: dailylitdeviations.deviantart.… Congratulations on your DD!

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by ing the News Article. Keep writing and keep creating.
raspil Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013   Writer
neat!  thank you again for the support :hug:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013   General Artist
congratulations on both the DLD and DD on such a splendid piece, dear one. :heart:
raspil Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013   Writer
thank you very much :-)
Mystic-Cheetah Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013
One of the most powerful pieces I've read in a long, long time.
raspil Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013   Writer
thank you
Parallaxm Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013
There's something so... candid about this. I can't describe it any better, it's something unbelievably intangible, but you've caught it, zoomed in on it, and stared it in the eye. There's no fanfare or mawkish sentiment- but somehow the tension just keeps building despite the blatant lack of action (at least, up until Ingrid shows up in the picture). Great pace and powerful writing. Thank you for sharing this.
raspil Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013   Writer
thank you for reading and enjoying it.
SurrealCachinnation Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013   Writer
Great to see your name in the footer!  Congrats on another well-earned DD.  :highfive:
raspil Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013   Writer
word :hug:
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